Poem: ‘The Return’

Personification of Autumn (Currier & Ives lith...

Personification of Autumn (Currier & Ives lithograph, 1871) (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

She was sat
on the old porch, a piece
of me I’d left
behind
in some spring
long ago. I knew it
in an instant, as
soon as she looked up—
our minds dovetailing as if
nothing had happened
in those draining,
intervening years. A part
of me wanted
to leave,
to move on and deny
what my heart was insisting, but
the spark was still there,
some sweet, indefinable
thing.

She tapped
the space beside her and
I sat down
on the creaking pinewood. The air was
still,
a low September sun
buttering the track
in front of us
and the turning trees
all around us
and the pale skin
of her arms, her legs,
and that gentle,
dappled face.

“Do you remember
when we were spring?”

I nodded, watching
her lips break
into that dimpled smile. In
her eyes I saw again
the boats
and the blossom,
like promises, journeys
only taken in our minds

poem © copyright David F. Barker 2012

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34 comments

  1. journeyintopoetry · September 8, 2012

    Beautiful as ever!

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  2. Susan L Daniels · September 8, 2012

    David, I love this. Do you remember when we were spring? So sweet, looking at spring from September.

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  3. brian miller · September 8, 2012

    this is tender and beautiful…love it…esp from when she asks you the question about being spring and on….great response sir

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  4. claudia · September 8, 2012

    wow..what an encounter…love the lips breaking into that dimpled smile…can really see it…do you remember when we were spring…tightly penned emotions…

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  5. Louise · September 8, 2012

    Beautiful…I love the imagery in this & “like promises, journeys
    only taken in our minds” …captures the feelings of nostalgia so well .. 🙂

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  6. Lori McClure (@lorimcspeaks) · September 8, 2012

    Such sadness and longing. You did a nice job of weaving that sense of loss throughout, that struggle in the leaving of a piece of yourself behind.

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  7. Playamart - Zeebra Designs · September 8, 2012

    oooooh! i liked this a lot! thanks so much for sharing your poetry with all of us! don’t ever stop! z

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  8. Sabio Lantz · September 8, 2012

    Fun flow — unhindered. 🙂

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  9. lscotthoughts · September 8, 2012

    A beautiful ode with lovely metaphors and imagery , David (our universes must have been parallel)! 🙂

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  10. lscotthoughts · September 8, 2012

    I forgot to mention one of my favorite phrases…”a low September sun buttering the track in front of us” wonderful!

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  11. John (@bookdreamer) · September 8, 2012

    Taps into the reflective energy of autumn

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  12. ManicDdaily · September 8, 2012

    Sweet gentle poem – I love the sun buttering the track. k.

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  13. Poet Laundry · September 8, 2012

    Really enjoyed the graceful flow of this piece and the imagery of:

    a low September sun
    buttering the track
    in front of us
    and the turning trees
    all around us

    Beautiful write.

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  14. shewritesherenow · September 9, 2012

    our minds dovetailing as if
    nothing had happened
    in those draining,
    intervening years.

    Bravo! Simply stunning.

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  15. Betty Hayes Albright · September 9, 2012

    David, I love this – it’s one I can relate to: The autumn of where we find ourselves now. (How fast the years flew by….) And that spark of spring that still shines in our eyes and memories, of a love from long ago.

    And I love your imagery – the

    “…low September sun
    buttering the track
    in front of us”

    is delightful!!

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  16. Mohana · September 9, 2012

    beautifully so, of love and the memories left. loved, loved this one!!

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  17. davidlandgrebe · September 9, 2012

    Great Poem David, I enjoyed it very much.
    David. L

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  18. dfb · September 9, 2012

    Thank you so much Betty!

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  19. dfb · September 9, 2012

    Thank you very much Lauren!

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  20. David King · September 9, 2012

    This is simply wonderful in its sentiment and feel.

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  21. hypercryptical · September 9, 2012

    Truly beautifully gentle.

    Anna o]

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  22. Wendell A. Brown · September 9, 2012

    Beautiful words, that bring to life a wonderful moment again….your discription is vivid and vibrant…excellent poem my brother…a joy to read!

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  23. Laurie Kolp · September 9, 2012

    Great metaphor of a relationship as seasons.

    I love the air as “a low September sun
    buttering the track
    in front of us”

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  24. Victoria C. Slotto · September 9, 2012

    This is absolutely charged with nostalgia. In this autumn season of life I often question the “what ifs’?” Loved it.

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  25. Mama Zen · September 10, 2012

    Beautiful!

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  26. Three Well Beings · September 10, 2012

    “a low September sun buttering the track in front of us”–I loved this line! So moving and lovely. Debra

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  27. Soma Mukherjee · September 10, 2012

    oh it is so beautiful and stunning David ..remembering the springs and some falls…

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  28. dfb · September 10, 2012

    Thank you so much Soma! The tweet as well!

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  29. Francina · September 11, 2012

    very very beautiful, David! I love it!
    Caio, Francina

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  30. granbee · September 12, 2012

    Such special treasures are friends who greet autumn with us just as warmly as they exuberantly danced in the meadows of our springtimes with us.

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  31. Ina · September 14, 2012

    Hi David, sorry to be so late with my comment, I love this poem and the idea that goes with it.

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  32. bardessdmdenton · September 14, 2012

    We can’t go back … but, then, we can, a little. And you have expressed that so simply and poignantly.

    “Do you remember
    when we were spring?”

    Beautiful.

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  33. Barbara Bamber | justasmidgen · September 16, 2012

    This is so lovely.. I reposted on twitter so others could read.. just so touching!!

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  34. dfb · September 16, 2012

    Thank you Barbara – you’re very kind!

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