Ghazal?: ‘A picture of you’

A picture of you

you cupping daffodils in sacred space
this picture of you framed in sacred space

yes I’m dreaming of spring, of light, of warmth!
a new life together, our sacred space

we’ve returned like birds in hope of new life
preparing for love in lush sacred space

what peace there may be, let’s find it again
near where the lilies grow, their sacred space

here, walking free, he whispers words of love
so we join him to share his sacred space

© copyright David Francis Barker 2011

*This has been work in progress for many months, but like all poetry I now abandon it, at least in this form.
Whether it can still be called a ghazal, I’m not sure. The last verse originally had a full reference to me, but I changed it to the third person and left it as the phrase ‘walking free’, which is a weak link to Francis, my middle name, which could mean ‘free man’, or perhaps, ‘little Frenchman’! Anyway, the original idea was to imagine Saint Francis in a garden with the birds but I guess it has morphed now into a romantic wish with hints of Francis walking somewhere in a beautiful garden, which might well be a nice place to be.
The painting (or a part of it) is my take, an impression if you will, of Monet and his water lilies, mixed media on canvas.

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18 comments

  1. abichica · November 18, 2011

    Oh so beautiful.. i really enjoyed it.. and the picture is amazing.. 😀

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  2. Shiny · November 18, 2011

    loved the picture, there’s somrthing hidden in the picture, but still so visibe, devine..

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  3. Shawna · November 18, 2011

    I like this line: “preparing for love in lush sacred space”

    It’s nice to meet a fellow poet/painter. 🙂

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  4. David Francis Barker · November 18, 2011

    Thank you, you’re very kind

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  5. David Francis Barker · November 18, 2011

    Yes, nice to make your acquaintance, too! Thanks very much

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  6. Beth Winter · November 19, 2011

    You penned wonderfully in this form and the painting is captivating. 🙂

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  7. Mama Zen · November 19, 2011

    This is lovely!

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  8. claudia · November 19, 2011

    oh david…really love that painting…it’s serene and so are your word..such a peaceful flow and atmosphere..preparing for love in lush, sacred space..hmm..

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  9. timotheous128 · November 20, 2011

    Stunning. This is the only word I can think of. You have blended art with poetry, two of my very favorite things.

    You, sir, have a new follower. 🙂

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  10. thespiderfarmmanager · November 20, 2011

    Really beautiful words and really beautiful painting.

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  11. neelthemuse · November 20, 2011

    What a lovely union of art and word! David your picture is all light! Lovely….

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  12. David Francis Barker · November 20, 2011

    Bless you, thanks for comments!

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  13. David Francis Barker · November 20, 2011

    Thank you so much!

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  14. Tinytoes · November 21, 2011

    Both the picture and poem are too good 🙂 🙂

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  15. David Francis Barker · November 21, 2011

    Thank you!

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  16. Ina · November 22, 2011

    Hi David, Ghazal; I shall look it up, this is a beautiful romantic poem!

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  17. Shiny · November 23, 2011

    hii david,, my previous blog- tripornaghosh.worpress.com mistakenly got deleted..this is the link to my new blog-

    http://crowdedsolitude.wordpress.com/

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  18. David Francis Barker · November 23, 2011

    OK thank you!

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