Silent Wings
Looking up into darkness
he asks if that smudge is Andromeda.
She thinks it may be.
He’s heard its light takes
two million years to reach his eyes,
stories on swift silent wings;
galaxies so far away,
so near at hand
like froth spinning round
in her coffee cup.
‘I’ll go there one day,’ he says
‘Why not go right now?’
she asks – ‘in your mind!’
He looks up once again
his mind big like the light-filled sky,
recalling her story of Horus
crossing millions of years
© copyright David Francis Barker 2011
*illustration done wholly digitally
Wonderfully eloquent … the lines “two million years to reach his eyes/stories on swift silent wings/galaxies so far away” were especially evocative. I could “see” this playing out in my mind as if I could close my eyes and watch someone else’s life across the cosmos.
Lovely!
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Beautifully told, so many lovely thoughts in here, it’s hard to pin down my favourite!
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Thank you! You’re very kind (again!) 😉
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Thanks once again! 🙂
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It sounds like he has met the right woman! Beautiful imagery~
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So beautifully written!
I just love “like froth spinning round in her coffee cup”. What an unusual simile that is just perfect here!
Christine
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I love where this prompt took you.
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Lovely! You have such a wonderful transparency in your words David, and yet they are laced with layers of metaphor and meaning. Really liked this poem… one of my favourites of yours I have read so far.
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Stunning; I really like this one, so beautifully written and very touching
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Nice shot and really nice poem! Thank you for sharing!
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wonderful!
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‘I’ll go there one day,’ he says
‘Why not go right now?’
she asks – ‘in your mind!’
He looks up once again
his mind big like the light-filled sky…’
Lovely reflection here, and beautifully expressed. The moment is now.
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Why not go there now in your mind indeed! Wonderful poem.
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So romantic, wonderful poetry.
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A wonderful scientific/esoteric blend to enchant us, David. I’ve noticed a lot of comments use “wonder-full” and I don’t like to be redundant, but…it is. I also like the mythological aspects of this that give such a sense of universality.
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thank you!
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Christine, I’m grateful!
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Thank you very much!
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Angela – thank you so much!
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Thank you again!
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Thank you once again!
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nice…love how your weave this, like several threads into one…the near and far and bridging gaps…and mentioning coffee never hurts…smiles..
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I love this, and his moment of illumination:
“He looks up once again
his mind big like the light-filled sky,”
Beautiful!!!
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Nice post: poem and illustration.
That would be a wonderful mind – big and light filled.
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Love it! And that is a lady worth knowing.
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So wonderful and clever, David!
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Thank you once again! 🙂
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Jamie – thank you so much!
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Absolutely lovely. Clear, romantic and completely immersive.
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Thank you so much! You are very kind.
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Very nicely done! And as usual accompanied by nice illustration.
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amazing descriptions. wow.
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Once again you have weaved us all a world from your words and your visuals, allowing a a transportation of mind that the body will never quite catch up to…But why would we want to? Our minds are happiest reading these words, transcendant and other wordly. Thank you.
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Louise – thank you so much! 🙂
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an adventure to space in our minds…well with NASA’s budget and failures, that’s the only way to space
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Yes, indeed! Thank you for your comments.
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Time and light, intangible but visible, incredible…
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this is definitely a lovely piece, I love the imagery portray from each lines and the paintings, wow… truly awesome… 🙂
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Wow! is what comes to mind….
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Thank you!!!!!!
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