Poem ‘Silent Wings’

Silent Wings

Looking up into darkness
he asks if that smudge is Andromeda.
She thinks it may be.
He’s heard its light takes
two million years to reach his eyes,
stories on swift silent wings;
galaxies so far away,
so near at hand
like froth spinning round
in her coffee cup.
‘I’ll go there one day,’ he says
‘Why not go right now?’
she asks – ‘in your mind!’
He looks up once again
his mind big like the light-filled sky,
recalling her story of Horus
crossing millions of years

Β© copyright David Francis Barker 2011

*illustration done wholly digitally

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40 comments

  1. Gillian Colbert · December 15, 2011

    Wonderfully eloquent … the lines “two million years to reach his eyes/stories on swift silent wings/galaxies so far away” were especially evocative. I could “see” this playing out in my mind as if I could close my eyes and watch someone else’s life across the cosmos.

    Lovely!

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  2. Eve Redwater · December 15, 2011

    Beautifully told, so many lovely thoughts in here, it’s hard to pin down my favourite!

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  3. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Thank you! You’re very kind (again!) πŸ˜‰

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  4. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Thanks once again! πŸ™‚

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  5. susielindau · December 15, 2011

    It sounds like he has met the right woman! Beautiful imagery~

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  6. journeyintopoetry · December 15, 2011

    So beautifully written!

    I just love “like froth spinning round in her coffee cup”. What an unusual simile that is just perfect here!

    Christine

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  7. vivinfrance · December 15, 2011

    I love where this prompt took you.

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  8. Angela · December 15, 2011

    Lovely! You have such a wonderful transparency in your words David, and yet they are laced with layers of metaphor and meaning. Really liked this poem… one of my favourites of yours I have read so far.

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  9. Littleskew · December 15, 2011

    Stunning; I really like this one, so beautifully written and very touching

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  10. Stefan · December 15, 2011

    Nice shot and really nice poem! Thank you for sharing!

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  11. ebbtide · December 15, 2011

    wonderful!

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  12. bardessdmdenton · December 15, 2011

    β€˜I’ll go there one day,’ he says
    β€˜Why not go right now?’
    she asks – β€˜in your mind!’
    He looks up once again
    his mind big like the light-filled sky…’

    Lovely reflection here, and beautifully expressed. The moment is now.

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  13. C.L. Sostarich · December 15, 2011

    Why not go there now in your mind indeed! Wonderful poem.

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  14. susanjanejones · December 15, 2011

    So romantic, wonderful poetry.

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  15. Victoria C. Slotto · December 15, 2011

    A wonderful scientific/esoteric blend to enchant us, David. I’ve noticed a lot of comments use “wonder-full” and I don’t like to be redundant, but…it is. I also like the mythological aspects of this that give such a sense of universality.

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  16. df barker · December 15, 2011

    thank you!

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  17. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Christine, I’m grateful!

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  18. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Thank you very much!

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  19. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Angela – thank you so much!

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  20. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Thank you again!

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  21. df barker · December 15, 2011

    Thank you once again!

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  22. brian miller · December 15, 2011

    nice…love how your weave this, like several threads into one…the near and far and bridging gaps…and mentioning coffee never hurts…smiles..

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  23. Betty Hayes Albright · December 15, 2011

    I love this, and his moment of illumination:

    “He looks up once again
    his mind big like the light-filled sky,”

    Beautiful!!!

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  24. Jamie Dedes · December 15, 2011

    Nice post: poem and illustration.

    That would be a wonderful mind – big and light filled.

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  25. georgefloreswrite · December 16, 2011

    Love it! And that is a lady worth knowing.

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  26. lscotthoughts · December 16, 2011

    So wonderful and clever, David!

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  27. df barker · December 16, 2011

    Thank you once again! πŸ™‚

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  28. df barker · December 16, 2011

    Jamie – thank you so much!

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  29. thoughtsontheatre · December 16, 2011

    Absolutely lovely. Clear, romantic and completely immersive.

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  30. df barker · December 16, 2011

    Thank you so much! You are very kind.

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  31. zumpoems · December 17, 2011

    Very nicely done! And as usual accompanied by nice illustration.

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  32. Morning · December 17, 2011

    amazing descriptions. wow.

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  33. Louise Jaques · December 18, 2011

    Once again you have weaved us all a world from your words and your visuals, allowing a a transportation of mind that the body will never quite catch up to…But why would we want to? Our minds are happiest reading these words, transcendant and other wordly. Thank you.

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  34. df barker · December 18, 2011

    Louise – thank you so much! πŸ™‚

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  35. zongrik · December 19, 2011

    an adventure to space in our minds…well with NASA’s budget and failures, that’s the only way to space

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  36. df barker · December 19, 2011

    Yes, indeed! Thank you for your comments.

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  37. Lindy Lee · December 20, 2011

    Time and light, intangible but visible, incredible…

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  38. willofheart · December 20, 2011

    this is definitely a lovely piece, I love the imagery portray from each lines and the paintings, wow… truly awesome… πŸ™‚

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  39. neelthemuse · February 9, 2012

    Wow! is what comes to mind….

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  40. dfb · February 9, 2012

    Thank you!!!!!!

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