Poem ‘Floss’

Floss

And I followed you,
holding desperately your trailing hand.
From dodgem screams in head-on collision,
to long kisses on carousels,
sitting the wrong way—
facing you,
holding you—
Yes, I was daring you!
That smile behind your eyes like a loving sun
which I met devouring candy floss,
sugar highs spinning lips together,
meeting and melting our cares;
suspended in ghost trains,
scaring you, opportune for me.
And later, strolling slick sands,
the far bass thuds
tripping our hearts,
setting off our lives:
Still in motion

poem © copyright df barker 2012

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51 thoughts on “Poem ‘Floss’

  1. oh this is lovely…never kissed someone on a carousel…but sounds wonderfully romantic.. love the mood in this…love and fun and depth..

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  2. mmm nice…kisses on the carousel…up there close to the stars you know, a bit of magic can happen at the fair…and you never know where that might lead…playfully romantic..i like…

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  3. Yes, get your girlfriend (boyfriend) to sit on same horse facing each other – being small helps, mad too, but my imagination is one of my better ‘gifts’!

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  4. Lots of good stuff here, but it’s the simple pumping of a line like ” the far bass thuds” which nails the piece to the ground for me… I like.

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  5. lots of nice visuals, really like how it’s written and being addressed to another. Really nice read. Thanks

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  6. sugar highs spinning lips together,
    meeting and melting our cares;

    For me these lines were the catalyst your poem seemed to crystallise around. Lovely.

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  7. With all the time I spent at fairgrounds as a kid, you’d think I would have a fair romance story. But no–still too nerdy then, I guess! If I did have one, I hope it would be like this.

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  8. 🙂 Lovely and romantic! I always wondered why boys dare so much, getting themselves in danger, but now I realize, it is to impress girls 🙂 never thought of that.

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  9. An interesting set of ideas, particularly fairgrounds as opportunity. I think we all felt that when we went to them as children or teenagers – anything could happen there.

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  10. superb written romantic poem, David, which brings back lots of memories from my teenage days. . Thank you so much for sharing your delightful poem.

    Ciao, Francina

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  11. Childhood sweethearts at a seaside playground is what I am seeing as I read these lines. Thanks for the memories of watching my own small children at play along the Gulf of Mexico beaches near Mobile, Alabama!

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  12. This is lovely and whimsical and romantic, David! Really enjoyed it. And here is a beautiful line…’That smile behind your eyes like a loving sun’

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