Poem ‘Floss’

Floss

And I followed you,
holding desperately your trailing hand.
From dodgem screams in head-on collision,
to long kisses on carousels,
sitting the wrong way—
facing you,
holding you—
Yes, I was daring you!
That smile behind your eyes like a loving sun
which I met devouring candy floss,
sugar highs spinning lips together,
meeting and melting our cares;
suspended in ghost trains,
scaring you, opportune for me.
And later, strolling slick sands,
the far bass thuds
tripping our hearts,
setting off our lives:
Still in motion

poem © copyright df barker 2012

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51 comments

  1. claudia · May 26, 2012

    oh this is lovely…never kissed someone on a carousel…but sounds wonderfully romantic.. love the mood in this…love and fun and depth..

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  2. brian miller · May 26, 2012

    mmm nice…kisses on the carousel…up there close to the stars you know, a bit of magic can happen at the fair…and you never know where that might lead…playfully romantic..i like…

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  3. magsx2 · May 26, 2012

    Hi,
    What a beautiful poem, very nice, very romantic. 😀

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  4. dfb · May 26, 2012

    Yes, get your girlfriend (boyfriend) to sit on same horse facing each other – being small helps, mad too, but my imagination is one of my better ‘gifts’!

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  5. dfb · May 26, 2012

    Thank you very much Brian.

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  6. dfb · May 26, 2012

    Mags, thank you so much!

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  7. Heaven (@asweetlust) · May 26, 2012

    I like the loving sun and the motion of your words ~ enjoyed the read ~

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  8. Nikhil Jain · May 26, 2012

    Well romantic work!!! 🙂

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  9. Daydreamertoo · May 26, 2012

    How about that for fun and romance all thrown in together in one magical fair ground. You couldn’t ask for more, could you!
    Lovely! 🙂

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  10. ordinarylifelessordinary · May 26, 2012

    This was so lovely, sweet as candy floss!

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  11. Brian Carlin · May 26, 2012

    Lots of good stuff here, but it’s the simple pumping of a line like ” the far bass thuds” which nails the piece to the ground for me… I like.

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  12. The Course of Our Seasons · May 26, 2012

    I could imagine the sound of the calliope and smell the cotton candy – charming and tender scene. K

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  13. hobgoblin2011 · May 26, 2012

    lots of nice visuals, really like how it’s written and being addressed to another. Really nice read. Thanks

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  14. Laurie Kolp · May 27, 2012

    Really amazing!!

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  15. Patti · May 27, 2012

    What a lovely romantic story with a perfect ending. I loved it.

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  16. zongrik · May 27, 2012

    i like the pun in still in motion

    /roller coaster of dysfunction

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  17. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thank you so much, I appreciate it!

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  18. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thank you so much Patti!

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  19. dfb · May 27, 2012

    I’m grateful, thanks very much!

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  20. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thanks very much indeed!

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  21. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Brian, thank you so much!

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  22. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thank you very much, I do appreciate it!

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  23. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thanks a lot!!

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  24. pandamoniumcat · May 27, 2012

    Romance at the fair ground… lovely!

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  25. aprille · May 27, 2012

    Aaahhh,
    Those were the days.
    Sweet read, David.

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  26. David King · May 27, 2012

    sugar highs spinning lips together,
    meeting and melting our cares;

    For me these lines were the catalyst your poem seemed to crystallise around. Lovely.

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  27. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thank you very much Dianne!

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  28. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thanks very much for this!

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  29. dfb · May 27, 2012

    Thanks very much David!

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  30. redjim99 · May 27, 2012

    Nice romance, I like the contiuation of a story untold by the opening “And”

    Jim

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  31. charlesmashburn · May 27, 2012

    Very romatic version of a night at the fair. Nice!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/05/26/all-wide-eyed-and-loving-me/

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  32. ManicDdaily · May 27, 2012

    “still in motion” lovely as the whole poem. k.

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  33. susanjanejones · May 27, 2012

    That is too romantic for words David. True love is a gift.

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  34. Julie Laing · May 27, 2012

    With all the time I spent at fairgrounds as a kid, you’d think I would have a fair romance story. But no–still too nerdy then, I guess! If I did have one, I hope it would be like this.

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  35. rainang · May 28, 2012

    Hey I nominated you for the creative blogger awards, do check it out http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/27/sunday-ramblings-awards-awards/

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  36. Three Well Beings · May 28, 2012

    Delightful! I couldn’t help but smile as I read! Made me feel much younger…remembering 🙂 Debra

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  37. Ina · May 28, 2012

    🙂 Lovely and romantic! I always wondered why boys dare so much, getting themselves in danger, but now I realize, it is to impress girls 🙂 never thought of that.

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  38. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Hi, and thank you once again Ina!

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  39. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Thank you very much Debra!

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  40. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Hi, I am truly flattered, thank you so much!

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  41. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Hi, thank you so much – well, I do still have an ‘active imagination’! 😉

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  42. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Thank you very much Susan!

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  43. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Thank you so much for this!!!

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  44. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Thank you very much Charles!

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  45. dfb · May 28, 2012

    Thank you so much Jim!

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  46. E A M Harris · May 28, 2012

    An interesting set of ideas, particularly fairgrounds as opportunity. I think we all felt that when we went to them as children or teenagers – anything could happen there.

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  47. Francina · May 30, 2012

    superb written romantic poem, David, which brings back lots of memories from my teenage days. . Thank you so much for sharing your delightful poem.

    Ciao, Francina

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  48. dfb · May 30, 2012

    Francina, thank you so much!

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  49. dfb · May 30, 2012

    Thank you once again, Francina.

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  50. granbee · June 2, 2012

    Childhood sweethearts at a seaside playground is what I am seeing as I read these lines. Thanks for the memories of watching my own small children at play along the Gulf of Mexico beaches near Mobile, Alabama!

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  51. bardessdmdenton · June 4, 2012

    This is lovely and whimsical and romantic, David! Really enjoyed it. And here is a beautiful line…’That smile behind your eyes like a loving sun’

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