Poem ‘Date’

Date

One day there you were,
a diamond in my mind’s eye;
the little lady with strong dark eyes,
such verve, obligatory husky voice.
I’d rehearsed all my moves – you know,
the walk, the talk,
washed my hair especially,
three year old conditioner and all.
I knew I had to be special,
for you,
to be that all-singing male mix
of strength, humour and vulnerability
(frankly, nigh on impossible
unless your name is Depp).
Little wonder then I’d always disappoint,
fall flat, look a fool,
but tonight I didn’t –
because you didn’t turn up! –
unless you were that sexy bass player,
the little lady winking at me
with those dark gleaming eyes?

© copyright dfbarker 2012

*This is almost totally a product of the imagination!
Any events which might have inspired this occurred many years ago.

**The image is a digital creation

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40 comments

  1. claudia · January 7, 2012

    so cool david…the three year old conditioner cracked me up…and i bet she was that sexy bass player..this lady poetry has so many faces..sometimes she looks like johnny depp..smiles..and this gets highly inspirational then…smiles

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  2. walterwsmith3rd · January 7, 2012

    Sometimes after so many dates and girls it can be confusing. Alas our imagination brings it all together.

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  3. Robert · January 7, 2012

    Great rhythm, humorous, with a nice twist in the tail.

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  4. Ina · January 7, 2012

    hi David lol this is both funny and splendid 🙂 I love the image too. You should have gone for the bass player! At least she was there and she winked?

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  5. Soma Mukherjee · January 7, 2012

    LOL it so funny…and the efforts to get all ready for the date ..how dare she not show up…she would have had she known about the conditioner…hilarious..

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  6. df barker · January 7, 2012

    Thank you Claudia!

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  7. df barker · January 7, 2012

    Thank you Ina!

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  8. df barker · January 7, 2012

    Thank you!

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  9. df barker · January 7, 2012

    Soma, thank you!

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  10. kathryningrid · January 7, 2012

    Ah, the perfect embodiment of a blind date: hilarious + horrifying = memorable!

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  11. thundergoes · January 7, 2012

    Lovely! I especially liked the idea of rehearsing the moves, and also the impossible male combination of strength, humour and vulnerability. Nice job!

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  12. granbee · January 7, 2012

    D.F. just entranced by the glittery digital creation you posted here today! I am speaking of both the enhanced photo and the enhanced memory of youth romantic aspirations! Very gently amusing and evocative of so many youthful misperceptions of oneself!

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  13. df barker · January 7, 2012

    Thank you!!!!!

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  14. df barker · January 7, 2012

    Thanks very much!

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  15. lscotthoughts · January 7, 2012

    Loved the image and the photo and smiled at the 3 yr old conditioner! Wonderful imagination or true to life! Maybe you should write a “Date Two” starring the sexy bass player! 🙂

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  16. susielindau · January 7, 2012

    Her loss and the bass players gain!
    Great poem!!

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  17. redjim99 · January 8, 2012

    Really good piece of story telling. Well done,

    Jim

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  18. Renee Espriu · January 8, 2012

    You have quite a following here. I would have responded to you when you visited my site but your comments did not link somehow so I will thank you here. You have wonderful paintings and words to go with and I see you are published as well. Perhaps my site did not link as I have my own domain now at http://reneejustturtleflight.com In any case I will try to visit here to see what you have posted.

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  19. Betty Hayes Albright · January 8, 2012

    Wonderful – this made me smile!

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  20. Louise Jaques · January 8, 2012

    I think we’ve all been here David, the tension, the anticipation of a date, which I assure you, as a woman, is every bit as nerve-wracking as it is for a man! The visual of this poem, I especially love. The colouring is stunning, as are the subtle light spots which make it explode. Wonderful!

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  21. Soma Mukherjee · January 8, 2012

    Hey David I have nominated you for the Candle Lighter Award please go through the link to know more( there are no limits to how many you can nominate)
    http://somkritya.wordpress.com/2012/01/08/the-candle-lighter-award/

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  22. df barker · January 8, 2012

    Thank you very much!

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  23. df barker · January 8, 2012

    Thank you so much!

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  24. df barker · January 8, 2012

    Renee, thank you very much!

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  25. df barker · January 8, 2012

    Thank you very much, Louise!

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  26. df barker · January 8, 2012

    Betty, thank you!

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  27. df barker · January 8, 2012

    Thank you, you are very kind!

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  28. journeyintopoetry · January 8, 2012

    David,

    This made me smile out loud!

    Your writing is just wonderful, I want to read on when you have finished!!

    Christine

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  29. Thomas Davis · January 8, 2012

    I smiled when I read this. Lady poetry is always mysterious, but the truth is that you never disappoint.

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  30. Thomas Davis · January 8, 2012

    Beautiful detailed writing. Thank you. Ethel

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  31. Mary · January 8, 2012

    Wonderful writing. I just love all the detail you included, how the scene came alive. You paint scenes beautifully with your words.

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  32. Angela · January 8, 2012

    Wonderful poetry, David! And I just LOVE the image… I had to scroll back up when I’d read the poem to look at it again – it’s enchanting.

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  33. Fergiemoto · January 8, 2012

    I enjoyed this poem!

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  34. maturestudenthanginginthere · January 9, 2012

    I enjoyed your poem. The events which inspired this, as you say, were long ago – clearly however they remain strong in your memory. Thank you for sharing this.

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  35. Sana Johnson-Quijada MD · January 10, 2012

    hi david. “washed my hair especially,
    three year old conditioner and all” – favorite verse. enjoyed it all.
    my husband is still grossed out when i tell him what a hillbilly i used to b growing up. smile.

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  36. clara54 · January 10, 2012

    A romantic fool I am! Glad I found your site. Thanks for liking my interview at Marcie Writes…

    Peace & blessings,
    Clara

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  37. Caddo Veil · January 10, 2012

    This is great–and I love the nod to the Depp-ster. (Fortunately it only took a year for me to get over him, and return to my first-always love…)

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  38. Emma · January 11, 2012

    This is fun, David. I don’t know is it worse to wonder what might have been or to see that inevitable falling flat come to fruition? Hmmm… I think I could be the female version of this speaker. 😀 Love the art piece…it adds a nice touch to the poetry.

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  39. df barker · January 11, 2012

    Emma, thank you so much for your comments!

    Kind regards

    David Francis Barker

    Poetry collection, ‘Anonymous Lines’ available here: http://liten.be//j5nek

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  40. ed pilolla · January 13, 2012

    what a good date night, winks from her. i enjoyed your stamp on an iconic situation: getting stood up after hoping for so much. you have a payoff at the end and it’s quite an enjoyable piece. the art is really appealing.

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