Poem ‘Daffodil Girl’

Daffodil Girl

I took a picture of you.
The one where you’re cupping a daffodil,
kneeling in the sacred space,
where you wear your sky blue coat

with the sun in exaltation,
as if shining from your April face,
so round and vibrant and pink,
leaving me to the sombre shadows,

out of sight on the nether side.
And I was some strange Narcissus,
making sure I saw myself when
passing shop windows, always critical,

so self-absorbed and vain –
though far from glorious.
But I still remember that image,
the delicate touch of your fingers

on the flower, all caring and giving.
So thanks for being you,
for making me see beyond
this paltry vision of myself.

image and poem © copyright dfbarker 2012
poem taken from collection ‘Anonymous Lines’ available at amazon.
image partly digitally altered from a larger original.

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36 comments

  1. Pete Armetta · February 14, 2012

    This is truly inspiring, so affective. I totally enjoyed it, you’ve got the gift! 🙂

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  2. blessmylove · February 14, 2012

    Very nice and beautiful…

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  3. claudia · February 14, 2012

    so lovely…you made me see her as well..love the play on narcissus..

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  4. granbee · February 14, 2012

    A child picking daffodils definitely makes a better person of us, just because we looked and remembered. Lovely poem so fitting for February when I have many daffodils blooming in my garden!

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  5. magsx2 · February 14, 2012

    Hi,
    A beautiful poem, and I loved the way you finished the poem off in you last paragraph, well don.
    I love the painting, yellow flowers, always cheerful I feel. 😀

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  6. Raven of Leyla · February 14, 2012

    Oh what a lovely and tender memory
    I am partial to daffodils 😀
    Soon they shall be here…
    warm sweet field of yellow!!!

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  7. dfb · February 15, 2012

    Pete – I’m very grateful, thank you!

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  8. dfb · February 15, 2012

    Thank you so much!!!

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  9. Pete Armetta · February 15, 2012

    My pleasure, just calling it how I see it. 🙂

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  10. dfb · February 15, 2012

    Thank you so much Claudia!

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  11. dfb · February 15, 2012

    Thank you once again!!!

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  12. dfb · February 15, 2012

    Mags – thank you so much!!!

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  13. dfb · February 15, 2012

    Raven, thank you again!

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  14. Step On a Crack · February 16, 2012

    I nominate you for the Liebster Award!

    See
    http://steponacrack.wordpress.com/2012/02/15/the-leibster-award-thank-you-steph/

    for details!

    Peace, Jen

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  15. Ina · February 16, 2012

    Hi David
    Narcis is the Dutch word for Daffodil, named after Narcissus, as the flowers seem to watch themselves in the water like he did. I like the way the cupping of the daffodil and the vain-ness meet in the poem here 🙂

    beautiful poem and painting. 🙂

    Ina

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  16. Emma · February 16, 2012

    I love the contrast you’ve created here, David. What we see in those we love compared to what we find within ourselves comes across so clearly for me through the words. It’s wonderful when someone else can help us to move past the darkness within ourselves. Lovely poetry, as always.

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  17. Short Poems · February 16, 2012

    Beautifully done, love it !

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  18. Fiona.q · February 17, 2012

    so sweeeeeet 🙂

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  19. dfb · February 17, 2012

    Emma thank you so much!

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  20. dfb · February 17, 2012

    Fiona thank you!

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  21. dfb · February 17, 2012

    Thank yo so much!

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  22. dfb · February 17, 2012

    Ina, thank you so much once again!

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  23. dfb · February 17, 2012

    You are so kind and I’m grateful.

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  24. poeticjourney · February 17, 2012

    I have so much to read and catch up on! Love it! God Bless 🙂

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  25. dfb · February 17, 2012

    You too! Thank you!

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  26. poeticjourney · February 17, 2012

    You very welcome! God Bless 🙂

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  27. latebloomerbuds · February 18, 2012

    I am loving your words and your paintings are glorious. What comes first, the words or the paintings?

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  28. dfb · February 18, 2012

    Both together really, although I’ve only started to do this ‘more seriously’ over the past few years. Thank you!

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  29. Mira Jay · February 19, 2012

    i like the way you bare yourself…
    thanks; i also enjoyed the field you’ve made me visit

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  30. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Thank you Mira!

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  31. Thomas Davis · February 20, 2012

    A little introspection, brought on by a young girl in a glorious field of daffodils, who wears a sky blue coat,
    with the sun in exaltation,
    is probably a good thing. The vanity that bestrides all of us has the beauty of the peacock’s song, not its tailfeathers, and once in awhile beauty should send our mind reeling into where awe changes the perception of who we are.
    May we all give thanks to those who help us see beyond ourselves into a place where ourselves can be better.

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  32. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you so much for your comments, Thomas – I think you’ve nailed it.

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  33. LadyBlueRose's Thoughts Into Words · February 22, 2012

    Beautiful!
    as i wandered yesterday morning
    wildcrafting as i went along, I laughed
    with pure pleasure at the first daffodil blooming

    I like your very open descriptions of what you see ..
    Thank you for sharing

    )0(
    maryrose

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  34. dfb · February 22, 2012

    Thank you maryrose! My stuff tends to vary quite a bit, but I am prone to some wearing my heart on my sleeve occasionally!

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  35. bardessdmdenton · February 26, 2012

    I love this painting–the combination of colors, the movement! And really enjoyed how and where the poem leads.

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  36. dfb · February 26, 2012

    Thank you once more!

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