Poem ‘Dark’

Dark

Rook on the road verge ahead
how casually you’ll step aside,
only just avoid my wheels.
Is that why I smile at the mirror
where you promptly step back
to continue to pick and prod,
pulling at the roadkill entrails
some straitjacket driver provides?
Like the crow, the ravenβ€” few
are as bright as you, so dark
in colour and reputation

poem and image Β© copyright dfbarker 2012

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52 comments

  1. Frederick E. Whitehead · March 21, 2012

    This is a great little poem. I enjoyed it
    Immensely, thanks!

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  2. Pete Armetta · March 21, 2012

    Gosh are you in my car with me? hehh I’ve had such thoughts while driving around for sure. Particularly on my local awesome country roads where all kinds of wildlife stands in the road. πŸ™‚

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  3. Ina · March 21, 2012

    Hi David,
    what a delightful poem you have made of this encounter, and that is a great painting as well. Those birds are so black, they really are blue.

    Rook, we call them so too. (Roek)
    They don’t seem to mind the traffic, as they know it will give them food…
    πŸ™‚

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  4. magsx2 · March 21, 2012

    Hi,
    A very good describrition of the Rook. πŸ™‚

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  5. dfb · March 21, 2012

    Thank you very much!

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  6. dfb · March 21, 2012

    Pete, thank you so much!

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  7. dfb · March 21, 2012

    Hi Ina, thank you very much. Yes, rook, raven, crow, magpie… probably all similar in Dutch? Old English was much more like Dutch.

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  8. dfb · March 21, 2012

    Thanks very much Mags!

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  9. Emma · March 21, 2012

    Hey David, this feels deceptively simple. I have the feeling that there is a great deal more going on here below the surface as many possible ideas/scenarios come to mine after reading. Love the alliteration in this line- “Rook on the road verge ahead” and the solid imagery of the piece.

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  10. dfb · March 21, 2012

    Thank you once again, Emma. As ever, you are very perceptive. One of things that I wanted to get across was that we humans are far less free than we think -‘straitjacket’. πŸ™‚

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  11. Soma Mukherjee · March 21, 2012

    What a lovely poem, have encountered similar days,the description of driver was so funny and they are absolute menace

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  12. susielindau · March 21, 2012

    I love the creepiness of this one! I am finishing up my book and it will have similar images….excellent!

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  13. timotheous128 · March 21, 2012

    Love the subject matter! Excellent work, my friend!

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  14. jpon · March 21, 2012

    Good poem, great painting!

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  15. claudia · March 21, 2012

    ugh…yes… most of the time we stay on those well worn roads where the light shines brightest but our eyes glance to the sideways..

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  16. Russell Smith · March 21, 2012

    I love crows and ravens. They are so intelligent and they like to joke around with each other and with other birds. They fashion tools too!

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  17. Francina · March 21, 2012

    great poem, David! I enjoyed the read!

    Ciao,
    Francina

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  18. susanjanejones · March 21, 2012

    Edgy and real, love it!

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  19. gannonsmom · March 21, 2012

    “rook” sounds intelligent. And they are, aren’t they. The “k” sound is a bit of an hmpf, which it gave the driver after all.

    I remember learning Poe used the word “raven” in his famous poem, because the sound of the “r”, “v” and “n” lingered, like “nevermore…” and it fit the tone of the poem well.

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  20. Mira Jay · March 21, 2012

    Love the way you pass your thoughts like strawberry embedded in jelly…

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  21. Betty Hayes Albright · March 22, 2012

    David, great poem! Such intelligent birds as crows (ravens, blackbirds, et al) must be laughing at us “smart” (arrogant) humans wheeling through their territory, inadvertently providing them with meals. Made me smile with you, at the image in your rear view mirror. πŸ™‚

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  22. Sharp Little Pencil · March 22, 2012

    So glad you stopped by my blog so I could see this. Multi-talented person, loved the painting – your colors are vibrant and the greys of the background, hinting at the road, while your fabulous bird pries loose bits of this and that… as do we. Loved all of it! Amy Barlow Liberatore
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/03/20/chanteuse-deluxe-a-barlette-long-form/

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  23. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you Soma!

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  24. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you Susie

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  25. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you!!!

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  26. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Joe, thank you very much!

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  27. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you Russell!

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  28. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you Francina!

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  29. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you very much Susan!

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  30. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you very much – your comments are most welcome!

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  31. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Mn, thank you! πŸ™‚

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  32. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you once again Betty, your comments are very perceptive, as ever…

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  33. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you very much Amy!

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  34. gerard oosterman · March 22, 2012

    Lovely poem. A bird like a rook here is the Magpie. During early spring they become very protective of their young and can become aggresive to people and swoop down on them and peck at their heads. Kids paint scowling faces on the back of their bicycle helmets to prevent being attacked…

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  35. Ina · March 22, 2012

    Hi David, in reply to your reply: Raven = raaf, crow = kraai, so that sounds a bit similar in Dutch, but magpie = ekster. πŸ™‚

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  36. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Thank you so much!

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  37. dfb · March 22, 2012

    Hi Ina, English has changed so much over the years the original for ‘magpie’ might well have been something similar to ‘ekster’. The old English for ‘creation’ was ‘frumshaft’ – typical of the process that’s been going on in English for a thousand years: French/Latin/Greek etc words replacing native words.

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  38. granbee · March 22, 2012

    The rook is just very self-confident–and you write about him so self-confidently, with celebration of his antics, as well! Thank you, DF!

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  39. dfb · March 23, 2012

    Thank you very much Granbee!

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  40. Lindy Lee · March 23, 2012

    Color of the rook done well & straightjacket driver word tale. Your work stands out here on WordPress…

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  41. dfb · March 24, 2012

    Lindy, thank you so very much!

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  42. tshauambea · March 24, 2012

    The darkness strikes you as soon as you look at the painting ; Lovely

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  43. rangewriter · March 24, 2012

    Your poetry never fails to astonish me.

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  44. dfb · March 24, 2012

    Thank you so much! Did you have a nice holiday? Are you back?

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  45. rangewriter · March 24, 2012

    I had a wonderful holiday! Thank you. Yes, I got home last Tuesday and have been digging out since then. So much to catch up on.

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  46. dfb · March 25, 2012

    Yes! All the very best to you and take it easy…

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  47. Jamie Dedes · March 27, 2012

    Bravo. And I’m so enjoying my visit here.

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  48. dfb · March 27, 2012

    Thank you Jamie!

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  49. lscotthoughts · March 29, 2012

    David, this was haunting, as I can imagine several different meanings, but well written, as always, and what a perfect “dark” image! πŸ™‚

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  50. dfb · March 29, 2012

    Thank you Lauren, I appreciate your comments, as ever.

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  51. bardessdmdenton · April 1, 2012

    This is an excellent depiction–and conclusion–of this scene. Love the sense that the rook may have more freedom than you do. And the title is perfect…and very telling…

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  52. dfb · April 1, 2012

    Once again, I’m grateful to you – thank you!

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