Poem ‘Pat 1.0’

Marlene Dietrich photograph

Marlene Dietrich photograph (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

Pat 1.0

A girl from the future, she’d said,
a real chic-chic-whirr!
Pat was her name, dark high heels and
clinging pink dress, a row of
little red buttons before me
which (the paperwork said), would ‘lead
to other worlds’.
So I pressed the bottom button, a thirty
second hologram projected from her eye,
a précis
from my time to hers: “My god!”
I said, all-a-gaga,
she really makes President?”
Button two appealed to my
sense of history. “I can be
any figure you like,” she giggled. So
I thought of Genghis Khan and
recoiled, I mean
I fell to the ground—
the stench of his breath and
bloody blade! so real,
but even he had a human eye.
Button three was ‘anywhere, anytime’,
so there we were in a darkening
Berlin bar, surrounded by
art deco, lots of nods and smiles;
I felt the spirit keenly, the zeitgeist
over my shoulder, whispering: ‘seize
the moment, this
brief,
precious time’.
And then she stood and sang for me
like Piaf, posed
like Dietrich, sizzled
like Kitt, singing how old fashioned she was but
I just wasn’t a millionaire, although
“zat, darlink,” she purred, with a brush
of mink on my cheek, “vill be easily
fixed!”
I felt
a little like Faustus before
Helen of Troy, though
she was no Mephistopheles;
more legion, everything rolled into one app.
All this time her top
button had intrigued the most.
“Go on— pat it!” she said, smoking
cross legged.
“You see?” She kicked
off a heel, letting
down her futured hair.
“Yes,” she whispered, pulling me
close, “and I, my sweet,
am just the beta version.” I looked
briefly
down on Metropolis
from floor 159, so brave,
so new.
Some things, clearly,
would never change

Poem © copyright David F. Barker 2012

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59 comments

  1. claudia · June 30, 2012

    haha…this is so frickin’ cool david…love it..you took us on quite a journey with those little red buttons..ha

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  2. brian miller · June 30, 2012

    a real chic-chic-whirr…haha….see a woman like this is a scary for me…i dont know if i want everything i ever dreamed to be possible honestly….and there is just something haunting to me about loving an artificial life form…

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  3. brian miller · June 30, 2012

    really a great read though…and some fine wordplay along the way…

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  4. Playamart - Zeebra Designs · June 30, 2012

    This is SO wonderful! 🙂 Z

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  5. Russell Smith · June 30, 2012

    Great poem!

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  6. Mary · June 30, 2012

    I enjoyed this, David. ONLY the beta version! Who knows what additional features the real version will have! Your poem intrigued me.

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  7. OrangeUaPoet · June 30, 2012

    that was a nice journey you sent us on on. thank you.

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  8. Sherry Blue Sky · June 30, 2012

    This is a GLORIOUS read, and a total escape into the most entertaining little sidetrip my brain has taken today! What a cool idea in response to the prompt. Hmmmm….where would I go if I had such a button?

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  9. Daydreamertoo · June 30, 2012

    Wow… very original and very clever write. All those characters woven into it. Steaming!

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  10. charlesmashburn · June 30, 2012

    Wow! This is one great bit of writing, David. I really enjoyed this one!

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  11. Mama Zen · June 30, 2012

    Incredibly cool write!

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  12. zongrik · June 30, 2012

    it’s like a montage of her movies – kewl

    3 radio button senryu

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  13. Christy Birmingham · June 30, 2012

    Awesome! I like “all-a-gaga” and “chic-chick-whirr”! Great use of language.

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  15. tashtoo · June 30, 2012

    Absolutely LOVE this! Way to run with the prompt!

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  16. Anna Montgomery · June 30, 2012

    This is my new favorite of yours – brimming with style, allusion, and sheer awesomeness.

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  17. ManicDdaily · June 30, 2012

    Super clever. k.

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  18. ManicDdaily · June 30, 2012

    PS – and also, somehow, very rhythmic. k.

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  19. Beth Winter · July 1, 2012

    Oh, those little red buttons. Incredibly creative and intriguing.

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  20. kaykuala · July 1, 2012

    You brought us into limitless dimensions David! It would have been fun. Where can I find one? Wonderful imagery! Great write!

    Hank

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  21. Lindy Lee · July 1, 2012

    Imagination will get you almost everywhere, however,
    reality inevitably strikes…

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  22. charityv · July 1, 2012

    A wonderfully witty parallel, part woman part ap : )
    They are both seductive, promising, and frustrating at once!

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  23. C Rose · July 1, 2012

    I enjoy how this begins with the simple grace of following a trail of buttons into the complexity you have created that remains harmonic to the reading. Well penned ~ Rose

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  24. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you so much, Rose!

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  25. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you very much!!!

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  26. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Hank, thank you very much!

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  27. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you very much, Beth!

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  28. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Hi, thank you so much!!

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  29. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you very much!!!!

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  30. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you very much indeed!

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  31. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Christy, thank you so much!

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  32. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you very much!!!!!

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  33. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you so much Charles!

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  34. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Thank you so much, I am grateful!

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  35. dfb · July 1, 2012

    I am very grateful to you, thank you!!!

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  36. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Mary, thank you so much!

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  37. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Hi, thank you very much!!!

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  38. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Brian, thank you very much!

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  39. dfb · July 1, 2012

    Claudia, thank you so much!

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  40. Soma Mukherjee · July 1, 2012

    Ha had a chuckle reading your encounter with the beta version..
    David big hugs…

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  41. John (@bookdreamer) · July 1, 2012

    Clever!

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  42. Ina · July 1, 2012

    🙂 Awesome!

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  43. RepressedSoul · July 1, 2012

    A real chic chic whir? Hahaa I need someone to take my photo properly lol! Excellent candid little story here David. Rather enjoyed the read 😉

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  44. kindredspirit23 · July 1, 2012

    Love Sci-fi. Putting it into a poem is marvelous.

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  45. dfb · July 2, 2012

    Thank you very much indeed!!!!!

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  46. dfb · July 2, 2012

    Soma, thank you very much!!!

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  47. dfb · July 2, 2012

    Thank you very much Shan! I appreciate it. 🙂

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  48. Laurie Kolp · July 2, 2012

    Love, love, love this!!!

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  49. Emma · July 2, 2012

    This is great, David. I love that it feels a bit historic and futuristic at the same time with your mix of details. Very fine bit of writing, and fun to read and imagine.

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  50. granbee · July 2, 2012

    Wonderful fun with the buttons, the virtual reality, and the variety of fantasies you confess here, DF! (tee,hee!) Quite the jolly read, dear man!

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  51. dfb · July 3, 2012

    Thank you GB! I don’t know where this one came from… to be honest.

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  52. dfb · July 3, 2012

    Thank you very much Emma – I don’t know what ‘muse’ was with me when I wrote this.

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  53. dfb · July 3, 2012

    Bless you for this!!! 🙂

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  54. Thomas Davis · July 4, 2012

    Wow! A science fiction poem that actually works. I love science fiction, but in poetry it never comes off. Somehow the poet tries to do science fiction the way they do in the novels, and the result is prose without zip or fun. This piece has so much of each that I am in awe. The imagination soars as you push buttons and flirt with an app and zing through history where Genghis Khan almost knocks you over with the stench of his breath and his bloody blade. If your writing gets any better we’ll have to find this particular app, push a button on her dress, and send you into old anthologies in libraries hidden on the moon in order to protect them from the Old Stoogies who took over the earth. There is inspiration in this poem. Inspiration!

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  55. dfb · July 5, 2012

    Once again, I thank you and I’m grateful.

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  56. Francina · July 6, 2012

    Incredible write , David… past and future well woven through each other in another dimension. Cool.

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  57. lscotthoughts · July 7, 2012

    Loved this “little red button journey” David and the fun language! Great write!

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  58. mattspotentialpoetry · July 15, 2012

    Uber groovy- I loved this speculative poem about the future of robots and man. Peace.

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