Poem ‘Raptor’

Raptor

Over church, a windmill,
warmer hued in a meagre sun,
through copses freshly naked
and into skies of madonna blue

My eyes are led easily,
catching the swift sole movements
like a gorgeous leaf circling
in elegant fall and flight

It all brings a rare smile
to winter’s thinnest lips,
this soaring, plaintive viola—
a primed glissando on his prey

image and poem © copyright dfbarker 2012

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44 comments

  1. Ina · February 19, 2012

    Hi David, what a scene 🙂 lovely! You always find a way to see and hear more, and reproduce it in a beautiful poem and painting, I admire that very much!

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  2. Pete Armetta · February 19, 2012

    “… to winter’s thinnest lips”: GLORIOUS. The visual, the scene you create, just wonderful.

    Pete

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  3. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Thank you Ina – very kind words!

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  4. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Thank you Pete, I’m grateful.

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  5. journeyintopoetry · February 19, 2012

    You have captured this scene so gracefully David

    I love “like a gorgeous leaf circling
    in elegant fall and flight”

    And the colours in your painting are graceful too

    Christine

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  6. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Hi Christine, thank you so much!!!

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  7. Eve Redwater · February 19, 2012

    So beautiful David!

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  8. cromwellshead · February 19, 2012

    Grand words Sir, grand.

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  9. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Thank you Eve!

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  10. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Thank you so much!!!

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  11. Soma Mukherjee · February 19, 2012

    To be able to express your thoughts in colours and words both, is such a gift…Beautiful painting … in love with the line
    “a primed glissando on his prey” absolutely marvelous piece 🙂

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  12. blessmylove · February 19, 2012

    Fantastic … Excellent…Wonderful…Liked it a lot..

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  13. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Soma, I thank you – my very best wishes to you.

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  14. dfb · February 19, 2012

    Thank you so much!!!!

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  15. Betty Hayes Albright · February 19, 2012

    So many vivid images in this – I love “skies of madonna blue”. You’ve described the flight and movements of raptors so clearly that I could SEE it. And of course the painting is beautiful!

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  16. rangewriter · February 19, 2012

    Oh my. The last stanza. I had to just keep rereading it like listening to a favorite tune over and over. I’ve never a fan of poetry, but you are teaching me much about this genre…the way it can be when it is good.

    Oh, of course, I love the water color as well. Couldn’t I just keep soaring in that sky of blue?

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  17. velvetinapurrs · February 19, 2012

    I really enjoyed this poem, ‘skies of madonna blue’ is lovely, & the close bringing sound to join sight, combining & the layering senses, adds a perceptive depth, but also nicely extends the elevation..reflecting flight ..hmm….lovely.,
    K-a

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  18. magsx2 · February 20, 2012

    Hi,
    Very nice words, and I love the colours in your painting very striking. 🙂

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  19. Thomas Davis · February 20, 2012

    A gorgeous poem, David. Its images are as powerful as your art, and, for me, even more so. What you accomplish is what the best poets accomplish: You give us enough detail for our minds to paint in the entire picture, involving creative thought, thought, emotion, and sight. This is a very good trick and one well worth exploring when you read it.

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  20. lscotthoughts · February 20, 2012

    Such beautiful colors and serenity in your painting to complement your wonderful poem, David…

    My eyes are led easily,
    catching the swift sole movements
    like a gorgeous leaf circling
    in elegant fall and flight

    Gracefully written, as always!
    Lauren

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  21. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you once again Lauren – so kind!

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  22. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you so much once again, Thomas!

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  23. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you so much Mags – best wishes!

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  24. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you so much for your comments, you are very kind.

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  25. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you once again, you are so very kind to me! My very best wishes to you.

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  26. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you so much once again, Betty, you are very kind! Best wishes, David

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  27. granbee · February 20, 2012

    A leaf floating down in glissandoing thrum upon you–how delicate is your poetic observation here,DF!

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  28. dfb · February 20, 2012

    Thank you Granbee!

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  29. claudia · February 21, 2012

    aaaah nice…the poem feels like a glissando itself…nice..

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  30. dfb · February 21, 2012

    Thank you Claudia, I appreciate it.

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  31. turukai · February 22, 2012

    WOW!!! Your words are so Eloquent! I love them thank you !
    ~Turukai~

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  32. Yousei Hime · February 23, 2012

    Like it all. Love that last line.

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  33. dfb · February 23, 2012

    Thank you Turukai!

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  34. dfb · February 23, 2012

    Thank you so much!

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  35. bardessdmdenton · February 26, 2012

    ‘My eyes are led easily’ over this lovely painting and poem!

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  36. Heather Whitley Gibson · February 26, 2012

    Great!!! nice leading the reader….

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  37. dfb · February 26, 2012

    Thank you!!!

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  38. dfb · February 26, 2012

    Thank you so much, Heather!

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  39. Broken Sparkles · March 7, 2012

    You are a Talent, with huge, eloquent, graceful capital “T”. It’s always a pleasure to stop by and read your words! Hopefully I’ll learn something from you and improve my writing!

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  40. dfb · March 7, 2012

    You are so kind! I really appreciate your work, too. Thank you so much!

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  41. Broken Sparkles · March 7, 2012

    I’ve done some collaborations with other bloggers, I’d like/ if you have the time and the will/ to write something together with you …

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  42. dfb · March 7, 2012

    Yes, of course! Good idea. Give it a bit of thought, sometimes two totally unrelated ideas ‘thrown’ together can create something really interesting. Perhaps, say, a poem of a few verses in which one writes one verse and the other responds with another? Or maybe a poem of a few lines by one, which is responded to, or inspires a second ‘counter’ part by the other, separated by an asterix, or something. You may have much better ideas than this! 🙂

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  43. Broken Sparkles · March 7, 2012

    That’s what I thought :)! Contact me at brokensparkles@hotmail.com and we can talk about it. I’ll respond later on, when I’m back home … Thank you!

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  44. dfb · March 7, 2012

    OK!

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