Poem ‘Flux’

The window is

just enough to
let in some air, to

tantalise the cat
hooked by

night’s soft invitation.
Something outside

is burning, hangs
in the yielding light, though

I’ve never
seen those crimson clouds

to dusky pink

and then to grey.
It’s a flux which

eludes me
every time.

Magic, you might say,
like being in space,

and now

© copyright David F. Barker 2012



  1. Susan L Daniels · September 20, 2012

    Wow–my favorite of yours.


  2. Daydreamertoo · September 20, 2012

    Beautiful imagery, Relaxed, yet, not. A state of flux can sometimes be a good thing.


  3. Emma · September 20, 2012

    This seems a bit different from some of your other poetry, David. I like it alot- the voice in it, it’s a bit mournful and feels contemplative – private in a way. It reminds me also of Robert Creeley a little with the phrasing you’ve chosen and the way you’ve used enjambment- which I really love. Enjambment can do so much for a poem, I find, when it is used just so- like you’ve used in here. Just a wonderful poem.


  4. Beth Winter · September 20, 2012

    Wonderful capture


  5. brian miller · September 20, 2012

    nice…great capture of the moment and for all the senses as well…i like hte feel of the door ajar and letting in the smells….a bit of magic for sure…


  6. dfb · September 20, 2012

    Thanks Brian – I appreciate it.


  7. dfb · September 20, 2012

    Bless you, Emma, I really appreciate your comments. I will have to look at Robert Creeley’s work, I hardly know a line! I think I’m probably a little too Anglo-centric. I must read wider than I do. Yes, I am trying to be experimental, using techniques like enjambment etc, but there is always the problem of ‘do I publish on blog or not?’ Thank you Emma. Take care.


  8. John (@bookdreamer) · September 20, 2012

    Captures the silence flow


  9. claudia · September 20, 2012

    love it…love the mood…love the closure…so intriguing…so open to think on…


  10. Laurie Kolp · September 20, 2012

    I can see those clouds now… beautiful.


  11. Sabio Lantz · September 21, 2012

    I loved this line: “It’s a flux which eludes me every time.”


  12. Wendell A. Brown · September 21, 2012

    Incredible write my friend…i really enjoyed it! Blessings!


  13. Betty Hayes Albright · September 21, 2012

    The essence of changes in the air – captured in lovely, pensive words!


  14. lscotthoughts · September 21, 2012

    Beautiful words, David! I love “hooked by night’s soft invitation” in this magical moment~


  15. danadampier · September 21, 2012

    Wonderful things can be experienced when we leave a door or window ajar! An awesome poem!


  16. Barbara Bamber | justasmidgen · September 21, 2012

    Oh, please always publish.. You’re poems always make my day, they’re so lovely!


  17. Mohana · September 21, 2012

    Such a beautiful poem!


  18. Soma Mukherjee · September 21, 2012

    Beautiful poem David of the the bliss and pain of being in that state…


  19. Ina · September 21, 2012

    Hi David, the rhythm is very well chosen here, or maybe came by chance, beautiful 🙂


  20. dfb · September 21, 2012

    Thank you so much Soma!


  21. dfb · September 21, 2012

    Thanks very much Barbara!!!


  22. dfb · September 21, 2012

    Thank you!!!


  23. dfb · September 21, 2012

    Thank you so much Lauren!


  24. dfb · September 21, 2012

    Thank you very much Betty!


  25. Francina · September 21, 2012

    beautiful written poem, David!


  26. susangeckle · September 21, 2012

    “Like being in space.” Love that line. Beautiful poem and I’ve been thinking about space lately because Neil Armstrong just recently died.


  27. Rashmi · September 21, 2012

    Beautiful poem.


  28. kkkkaty1 · September 22, 2012

    Lovely poem, makes me want to pay more attention to the state in flux moments..


  29. journeyintopoetry · September 22, 2012

    Absolutely fabulous David! I love this 🙂



  30. Polly Robinson · September 22, 2012

    One of my faves of yours from now on … I like the openness and hope … great write


  31. Victoria C. Slotto · September 22, 2012

    This is magical, Dave!


  32. bardessdmdenton · September 26, 2012

    Love this one, David! Especially:

    ‘just enough to
    let in some air, to

    tantalise the cat
    hooked by

    night’s soft invitation.’


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